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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
The presented pie charts illustrate the comparison of
units
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 of
electricity
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, that were produced by fuel in two countries, Australia and France in five diverse categories, say, coal, oil, natural
gas
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, hydropower, and nuclear
power
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 during a specific period of time (1980-2000). At first glance, the total production of
electricity
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 increased in both countries from 1980 to 2000. For Australians, using coal has been the main source for producing
electricity
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,
while
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 authorities in France preferred nuclear
power
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. In Australia, in 1980, total production was 100
units
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 which rose by 70 in 2000. The first
place
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 of source for generating electric
power
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 was coal, which rose to 80 in 2000 from 50 to 130. Despite using hydropower as an origin of
power
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 making, fuel
gas
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 sources
such
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 as oil and natural
gas
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 lost their interest and dropped to 2
units
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. In France, the total production of
electricity
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 doubled from 90 to 180
units
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 in 20 years. And even though nuclear
power
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 got third
place
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 as a source of making
power
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 by 15 in 1980, it upgraded to first
place
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 with 126
units
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 in 2000.
Although
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 coal had the same portion of 25 in both eras, natural
gas
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 hit a low from 25 to 2 which was in the lowest
place
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 beside hydropower.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, electricity, gas, power, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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