In some cities, people prefer riding bicycles rather than drive cars. In some other cities, people choose to drive cars rather than ride bicycles. What are the reasons for their preferences? Which one do you think is a better development?

It has been observed that, in a few places, individuals use bicycles
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of driving
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, in other cities, the masses go with
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rather than ride cycles. In
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essay, I will give reasons behind their preferences.
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, I believe that using fewer motor
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is a better development for the future society.
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with, nowadays all over the
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every big city is facing the issue of air pollution. To overcome that problem, the public needs some changes which help to decrease pollution
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maintain their health.
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, riding bicycles rather than using
cars
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in day-to-day life is helping them out.
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, the report comes out in the year 2020 that, the Chinese are able to reduce 40 per cent of air pollution by not using
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, it helps them to increase their health by riding bicycles.
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, it reduces traffic when they take cycles.
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, in
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developed era all wants to save their time by reaching early
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, for those cities which have big areas to cover so,
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low public transport they choose to drive. To explicate, most of the individuals have to

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your ideas are clearly connected and logically structured. The transition from the first paragraph to the second could be smoother to guide the reader.
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Provide a clearer opinion in the conclusion, stating explicitly which mode of transport you believe is better and why.
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Expand on your ideas with more specific examples or evidence, especially in supporting the benefits of riding bicycles and the drawbacks of cars.
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You have identified a significant topic, which is traffic and pollution, showing awareness of global issues.
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Your essay contains relevant ideas that address the prompt, discussing both sides of the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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