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Some people think if students are afraid of the teacher it is better. Others see that having a friendly relations is better. what do you think? Discus both points and give us opinion.

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Introduction
Nowadays the majority of
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people think the
students
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 must be afraid of the teacher ,
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 others believe that having
a friendly relations
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friendly relations
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 is better . In
this
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essay
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 I will outline the main points and write my opinion .
Body · 1
Firstly
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 I will start by looking at the
advantgaes
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advantages
 the relationship between the teachers and
students
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 must be strong and that
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built
 by the
recpect
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respect
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 each
others
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,
such
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 as
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the teacher
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 conserar as
a parents
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a parent
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 at the school and
thay
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they
 are
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responsible
about
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 them .
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Moreover
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the
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there is no
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for
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 the
over
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 strict that might
in
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bad
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a bad
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 way on some of
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students
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the students
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.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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 , there
is
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 drawbacks associated
to
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this
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 case
for example
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 ,
thay propaply
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they probably
 do not give the educators
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enough respect,
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as
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 a result , some
students
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be
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a
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spoiled
from
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 that treatment .
Furthermore
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 , they have to be
wises
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 and
wears
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 for all
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kinds
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 of people and treat them
on
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so
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 that they cannot do whatever
thay
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they
 do with everyone .
Conclusion
All in all , there is no doubt that issues have
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growing
in
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the
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worldwide , steps
are
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must be taken to
tackling
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this
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 problem , schools ,
parents
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and parents
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 , have
important
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an important
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 role to play and
deal
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dealing
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 with it .

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure to properly structure your introduction by clearly stating your opinion and the main points you will discuss.
task response
Check for spelling and grammatical errors, as they can detract from the clarity of your ideas (e.g., "advantgaes" should be "advantages").
task achievement
Try to elaborate more on your main points with specific examples to strengthen your argument and showcase your understanding.
task achievement
You have presented both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced perspective on the issue.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline
  • motivation
  • anxiety
  • positive learning environment
  • engagement
  • participation
  • academic performance
  • supportive
  • structure
  • authority figure
  • creativity
  • enthusiasm
  • balance
  • clear expectations
  • nurturing
  • respectful relationship
  • fear-based learning
  • structured environment
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