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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Global warming is one of the biggest threats human face in the 21st century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

Nowadays, one of the biggest problems
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 the planet is climate change and the sea levels which are gradually increasing at an alarming rate.
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 awareness as a solution. Global warming is being approved as one of the greatest issues people
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 in recent years. Arctic melting is a fundamental case because it will cause a shortage
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 worldwide drinkable water.
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lose coastal cities
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 the changes in the ocean levels.
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, the World Economic Force
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 that Italy and 10 more countries could disappear
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 the increasing sea levels. Telling people the truth of the global warming detrimental effect would raise
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awareness. Making citizens responsible is what could help governments to solve
this
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 plastic in the designated place and
use
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 recyclable goods is what a citizen could do and affect positively
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the environment.
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a fees
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 on those who don't follow the rules would make the process even faster.
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, recent
study
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 have shown that British people follow the law strictly when they know they will pay if they don't. In conclusion, global warming and sea level rising could affect the plant and humans negatively. Coastal metropoliton would be gone and clean water
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 face deficiency. In order to solve that,
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 must be revealed and involving the everyday person by making them responsible in the approach will faster it.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to provide a clearer structure in your essay by using appropriate linking words and phrases. Ensure that each paragraph has a distinct main idea and logically flows into the next one.
task achievement
Make sure to fully develop your solutions with more detailed explanations or examples. It's important that your suggestions appear feasible and realistic.
grammar and language
Check for grammatical accuracy, as there are some small errors affecting the clarity of your message, such as "the planet" instead of "the planet is" and "gonna" which is informal.
task achievement
Improve the specificity of your examples. Instead of just mentioning countries that may disappear, you could mention specific cities or provide statistics to enhance credibility.
content
Your introduction outlines the main issues and your focus on raising awareness is a relevant solution.
content
Some points regarding the consequences of global warming, like the impact on drinkable water, are effectively mentioned and are significant.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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