The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the shift in the percentage of market share among the three types. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the shift in the percentage of market share among the three types. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the shift in the percentage of market share among the three types. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The line graphs illustrate the cost of watching a movie, in
pounds
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, for
cinema
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tickets,
DVD
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and
watch
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watching
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online over a
six year
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span. The pie charts compare the percentage of market share for three different viewing methods in 2005 and 2011. In general,
cinema
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tickets
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ticket
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prices increased steadily,
while
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DVD
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prices remained mostly unchanged. The price for legal downloads decreased at first but
then
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rose again. Renting
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DVD
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DVDs
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had the highest market share in both years, though it slightly declined. Meanwhile, watching movies online will become much more popular by 2011.
Cinema
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tickets increased from around 8
pounds
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sterling to 11
pounds
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sterling in 2007. After staying stable in 2011, the price rose again to 14
pounds
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sterling in the
last
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year.
DVD
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prices began at about 6
pounds
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sterling and only went up a little to 8
pounds
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sterling. The price of legal downloads fell
down
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sharply from 8
pounds
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sterling to 6
pounds
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sterling, but
then
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gradually rose to 9
pounds
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sterling. In 2005, renting
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DVD
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DVDs
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held 64% of
market
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the market
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but
this
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fell to 56% in 2011. The share of
cinema
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attendence
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attendance
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dropped, from 30% to 18%.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of people who watched movies online rose significantly, from 6% to 26%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pounds, cinema, dvd with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Market share
  • Trend
  • Fluctuations
  • Stability
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Traditional theaters
  • Streaming services
  • Rentals
  • Consumer preferences
  • Technological advancements
  • Economic factors
  • Anomalies
  • Correlate
  • Specified time period
  • Significant increase
  • Highlight
  • Analyze
  • Shift
  • Feature
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