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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the outcomes of a
questionare
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questionnaire
question
of
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on
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 how often people buy and drink
a
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apply
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different types of
coffee
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 in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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of
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apply
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Australia. The first option is
bought
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to buy
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 fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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.
In
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apply
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Sydney
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 has 43.7 per
cent
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 of
city
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residents
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 and has almost the same amount as
Melbourne
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 which is 42.2 per
cent
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.
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 have
a
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apply
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nearly
same
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the same
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 amount, 34.2 per
cent
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 and 34.4 per
cent
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.
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Hobart
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 has 38.3 per
cent
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. The second line is bought instant
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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.
Brisbane
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 has 52.l per
cent
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. Other two cities that have
amost
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almost
 the same
number
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 are
Adelaide
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, 49.8 per
cent
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, and
Melbourne
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, 48.3 per
cent
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. The lowest
number
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 is 45.5 per
cent
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 of
Sydney
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 and The highest
number
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 is 54.1 per
cent
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 of
Hobart
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. The
last
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 option of the survey shows the percentage of
city
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residents
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 that went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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. In
Sydney
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, people went to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 bl per
cent
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 of
city
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residents
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. In
Brisbane
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, citizens went to a cafe for
coffee
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of
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or
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tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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weeks
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 55.4 per
cent
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. The lowest is
Adelaide
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that
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which
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 shows 49.9 per
cent
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 of
city
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residents
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. In
Hobart
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, people went to a café for
coffee
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of
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or
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tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 12.7 per
cent
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. The highest is
Melbourne
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that
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which
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 shows 103.3 per
cent
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. In conclusion, the highest
number
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 of the survey is the percentage of
city
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residents
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 that went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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the last
show examples
 4
weeks
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 because it shows almost the highest percentage in 3 types.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart, weeks, cent, city, residents, number, tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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