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The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
provide
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 key information about the percentage of people that went to cinemas during the week between the years 2003 to 2007. The
unite
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units
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 are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, It is clear from the graph that majority of the people
goes
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 to the cinemas
in
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at
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 the weekend.
In addition
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, Friday night has been consistent between 2003 to 2007.
Whereas
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, at the start of the week the percentage drop significantly of people attend to cinema.
According to
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 what is shown, Saturday
has been
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was
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 the
dominate
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dominant
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 day between 2003 to 2007 with nearly 42.5
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percent
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per cent
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. Sunday was
second
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the second
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 highest in 2005 and
then
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drop
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dropped
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 slightly to almost 33 per cent.
However
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, one of the consistent
day
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days
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 during the year is Friday with 30
percent
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. In terms of other days, Monday and Wednesday were the lowest. Thursday saw increasing in 2003 with 23
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percent
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per cent
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 and
then
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drop
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a drop
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. For Tuesday it
remanned
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remained
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 almost consistent
20
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at 20
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percent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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