Research indicates that the characterisitics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. which do you consider to be the major influence? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is true that an increasing amount of research indicates that natural characteristics are more influential than other
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believe that genetics
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personality more, others argue that the situations that happened have
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more significant impact. I firmly believe that
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experiences
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have more impact. The opponents might argue that genetics are strong enough to influence
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people
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behavior
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.
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, if the parent
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a temperament emotion,
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the children will more likely have
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temperamental feeling, following the parent's
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. When that happens, it will be challenging to deal with,
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have done some medical treatments.
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,
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experiences
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more crucial to shape someone's attitude because of the lessons they learned from their past
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. In order to learn something, someone
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to be in some specific situations.
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people
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are facing friendship breakups, making them a lot more appreciate other relationships they have which can
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develop their
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empathy
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believe that character can be changed
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older
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get. Back
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, I was always easily
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angry just because of small things
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that
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was something I
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to improve, and after a few efforts full of trial and error, I
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finally
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be more considerate and patient with anything, which
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me reduce my anger. In conclusion,
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conditions have some impacts
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people
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attitudes,
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life
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experiences
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and lessons are generally more significant.

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task response
Make sure to clearly outline your main points in the introduction, giving a roadmap of what you will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Try to connect your ideas more effectively to improve the flow of your essay. Using linking words can help with this.
coherence cohesion
Use varied vocabulary and sentence structures to make your writing more engaging.
task response
You presented your opinion clearly in the introduction and conclusion, which is crucial for the reader's understanding.
task response
Your personal example adds depth to your argument and makes it relatable, which is a strong point in your essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • genetic predisposition
  • temperament
  • sociability
  • resilience
  • nurturing environment
  • self-esteem
  • collectivist society
  • individualistic culture
  • personal experiences
  • adversity
  • dynamic nature
  • human development
  • influences
  • characteristics
  • trauma
  • developmental psychology
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