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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart presents what Anthropology graduates from a university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course which is divided into 6 categories ( full-time
work
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, part-time
work
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, part-time
work
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 and
postgrad
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study
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, full-time
postgrad
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study
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, unemployed and not known). The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in
work
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 after five years.
Overall
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, the pie chart shows that most students have full-time
work
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 after graduating from university. The table shows that the higher salary a person may have is more than 100
thousand
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dollars
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 in the government sector.
To begin
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 with, the pie chart shows that the
percentage
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 of students who have full-time
work
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 is 52%, and it is the higher
percentage
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. The second
percentage
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 is for part-time jobs about 15%.
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, the
percentage
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 of unemployed is 12% and there is an 8% of people who are non-known. There is a number of students who have part-time workwork and
postgrad
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study
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, the
percentage
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 is about 5%. And for people who have a full-time
postgrad
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study
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, the
percentage
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 is about 8%.
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, the table shows that salaries are depending on the type of employment. Most employees take 75000
dollars
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 to more than 100
thousand
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dollars
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 in freelance consultants ,
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 in government sectors, about 50% of workers take more than 100
thousand
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dollars
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.
In addition
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 to that , in private companies, about 35% of the employees take 50
thousand
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dollars
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 to 74999
dollars
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, postgrad, study, thousand, dollars, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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