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The graph shows the water use in gulf countries in 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the water use in gulf countries in 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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graph
 provides the key information about utilities the water in the sport of golf in many countries in the year 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are three categories that
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including
 Domestic,agricultural and industrial. It can be seen that the significant popularity of agricultural products
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was
 in
two
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the two
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 countries
whereas
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 the least common was industrial production in
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 nations .
According to
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 what is shown,
using
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water in the
gulf
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 of Bahrain
the
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domestic water is used more than industrial and agricultural it was above 40 % .
Likewise
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, the percentage of Kuwait
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used domestic was hot the peak
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approximately 61 per cent ,
while
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, Agricultural and industrial were at 19 % and 19%
perspectively
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respectively
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.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of Agriculture has
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increased in Qater and Oman , in
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, the proportion of industrial has
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decreased to under 20
per cen
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per cent
 in Qater and Oman.
ther
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There
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 a considerable percentage between domestic and agricultural in Saudi Arabia which , the kingdom of Saudi Arabia
depend
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 on agriculture more than industrial and domestics.

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