The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?
There is a view that the working duration should be shortened and lengthen the weekend duration.
This
essay agrees that a shorter working week benefits Linking Words
employees
and employers. Use synonyms
This
is caused by tiredness makes employee use their Linking Words
time
unproductively and Use synonyms
happiness
will increase their Use synonyms
performance
.
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Firstly
, if Linking Words
employees
feel tired, they tend to do unproductive things. By Use synonyms
this
I mean tiredness usually leads to loss of concentration. Linking Words
Therefore
, they are likely to leave their Linking Words
work
and do something else unrelated to the Use synonyms
work
. Use synonyms
For example
, many workers in Indonesia have a habit that they tend to have a chat with others about other things for 1-2 Linking Words
hours
before they clock out when they feel tired. Use synonyms
However
, these unproductive Linking Words
hours
can be just eliminated by shortening the working Use synonyms
hours
, Use synonyms
hence
the Linking Words
employees
will have more free Use synonyms
time
and the employer does not need to pay them for those unnecessary Use synonyms
hours
.
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Secondly
, the Linking Words
happiness
level of Use synonyms
employees
will determine their Use synonyms
performance
. To be more precise, workers who have more free Use synonyms
time
to have fun will increase their Use synonyms
happiness
level and Use synonyms
this
leads to them being willing to Linking Words
work
harder makes them have better Use synonyms
performance
. Use synonyms
For instance
, some high-earning companies in the United States have less working Linking Words
time
by 2 Use synonyms
hours
for their Use synonyms
employees
compared to the usual 9 to 5 working Use synonyms
hours
. Use synonyms
As a result
, they are happy to Linking Words
work
harder and use their Use synonyms
time
productively Use synonyms
instead
of complaining about long working Linking Words
hours
and procrastinating their tasks. Use synonyms
Therefore
, the company’s productivity increases a lot.
In conclusion, tiredness will lead to unproductive Linking Words
hours
and the Use synonyms
happiness
level of Use synonyms
employees
determines their Use synonyms
performance
, it should be better to extend the weekend duration and shorten the working week.Use synonyms
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