The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?
There is a view that the working duration should be shortened and lengthen the weekend duration.
This
essay agrees that a shorter working week benefits employees
and employers. This
is caused by tiredness makes employee use their time
unproductively and happiness
will increase their performance
.
Firstly
, if employees
feel tired, they tend to do unproductive things. By this
I mean tiredness usually leads to loss of concentration. Therefore
, they are likely to leave their work
and do something else unrelated to the work
. For example
, many workers in Indonesia have a habit that they tend to have a chat with others about other things for 1-2 hours
before they clock out when they feel tired. However
, these unproductive hours
can be just eliminated by shortening the working hours
, hence
the employees
will have more free time
and the employer does not need to pay them for those unnecessary hours
.
Secondly
, the happiness
level of employees
will determine their performance
. To be more precise, workers who have more free time
to have fun will increase their happiness
level and this
leads to them being willing to work
harder makes them have better performance
. For instance
, some high-earning companies in the United States have less working time
by 2 hours
for their employees
compared to the usual 9 to 5 working hours
. As a result
, they are happy to work
harder and use their time
productively instead
of complaining about long working hours
and procrastinating their tasks. Therefore
, the company’s productivity increases a lot.
In conclusion, tiredness will lead to unproductive hours
and the happiness
level of employees
determines their performance
, it should be better to extend the weekend duration and shorten the working week.Submitted by kelly on
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