You would like to take part in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation, and cost. Write at least

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing regarding the historical sewing seminar happening next month in New York. I would be most pleased if you could clarify a few specific details about the event for me.

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, I was wondering on which days the seminar will actually be held

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the registration

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it was noted that you have to arrive

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the morning of

11th

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the 11th

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of June

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so that the participants would have some time to get to know each other before the event itself. So, I was just curious if it will start on the 11th or the next day

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because unfortunately I could not be there from day one and I would not want to miss any learning activities at all.

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, maybe the price for the seminar would be smaller If I would join later?

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, I was interested in how much detail we will learn

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techniques and

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there be any individual practice for it available, because it is an area in which I am not too skilled and would really like to improve. And

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unfortunately

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I do not have any relatives living in or around the area of the city, so I would have to rent an apartment, but I do not really have the time to search for it, so maybe there is a place provided by the organizers for the participants to stay in? Thank you in advance! Faithfully,

oimigleSun May 18 2025

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Task Achievement

Clarify the exact start date of the seminar in the first paragraph. Instead of 'the next day', be specific if possible (June 12th).

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. The second paragraph could be split into two: one for cost inquiries and the other for accommodation details.

Task Achievement

The letter has a polite and formal tone, which is suitable for the context.

Task Achievement

The request for information is clear and specific, showcasing your interest in the seminar.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

238 words

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