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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart illustrates the findings of a survey conducted in five Australian
cities
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 about purchased and consumed drinking habits in the
last
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 4 weeks. There were three ways drinks consumed: bought fresh
coffee
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, bought instant
coffee
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, and went to
cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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 for
cofee
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coffee
 or
tea
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.
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, it can clearly be seen that from all three ways, the highest proportions of purchasers were for
coffee
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 and
tea
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 bought in the cafe, followed by instant
coffee
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, and
then
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 fresh
coffee
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. In terms of the highest consumption of
coffee
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 or
tea
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 from cafe shops, the highest proportions were
Sydney
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in Sydney
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, Melbourne, and Hobart, which recorded a little over 60%.
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 was followed by just over 55% in Brisbane, and
then
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 approximately 50% in Adelaide, which was the least
cities
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 consumed
coffee
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 or
tea
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 from cafes. Turning to the instant
coffee
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, Brisbane and Hobart had the highest proportions at a little under 55% of residents. Adelaide was next with exactly 50%, which accounted for the highest proportion for all types purchased. Sydney and Melbourne had the lowest at a little over 45%, each.
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, the highest proportion of fresh
coffee
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 consumers were in Sydney and Melbourne, which was approximately 43%. Hobart with about 40%
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 and Brisbane and Adelaide had the lowest at approximately 35%.The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s
coffee
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 and
tea
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 buying and drinking habits in five Australian
cities
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.The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s
coffee
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 and
tea
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 buying and drinking habits in five Australian
cities
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. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, coffee, tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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