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Band 3

Crime rates have been increasing in many cities around the world. What are the key problems contributing to this rise in crime, and what solutions can be implemented to tackle these issues?

A growing number of
case
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 in recent
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is grow
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 in a
varienty
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variety
 of
country
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countries
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such
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 as crime.
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regarding
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how the the
governemnt
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government
 can solve
about
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the problem and what
suggest
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suggests
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the
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solutions for
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 case.
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, many
coummnity
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community
 in the world need money
or
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 their life. So
that is
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 why, A number of
inhabitant
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do
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commit
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crime
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crimes
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for
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to
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 gain easy money.
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, they become steal or
flunder
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flounder
plunder
founder
 on the street using the
motobike
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motorbike
 or cars
for
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to
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 commit a crime,
becuase
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because
 they do not afraid
with
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of
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 the police or the regulations from the council.
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,
nowdays
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its
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it
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 many viral when I
waching
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watch
 the news on
televition
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television
 or smartphone like
kill
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people
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 and
take
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taking
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 their valuables side the street, it is so
danger
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 for a growing number of society. Aside from that, the Government must create
a
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new regulations like laws for
perpetrator
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perpetrators
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 to arrange crimes that exist in society in public
area
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areas
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.
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, the leadership have to create jobs for them and of
course
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 numerous
people
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 will support the regime to help many young
people
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 to
impropve
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improve
 their
carrier
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careers
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 for susses on the top.
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is become
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 the key
for aid
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to aiding
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other
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others
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farticularly
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particularly
for
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criminals
join
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who join
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corporatioon
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corporation
corporations
 to earn a lot of money and become kind
people
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. In conclusion, they do that because of
lack
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a lack
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 of job opportunities. So that, the administration should think
a lots
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a lot
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 concerning jobs for crowds of humans.

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Structure
Develop a clearer logical structure by organizing your ideas more systematically. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and support it with relevant details.
Examples
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Introduction and Conclusion
Improve your introduction and conclusion to encapsulate the main ideas of your essay, while also providing a clear overview and summary of your arguments.
Content
You have identified some key issues related to crime and attempted to offer potential solutions, showing an understanding of the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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