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The charts below show the favorite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the favorite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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chart
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compare
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compares
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 the data
betwwen
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between
 the
favorite
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favourite
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takaway
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takeaway
 of
pepole
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people
 in Canada
Also
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, The
chart
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
figurs
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figures
figure
 of Indian restaurants in Canada between the period 1960 and,2015.
According to
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 the above
chart
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 ,
overall
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,it's clear that
,
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apply
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 There is a general trend of increase in Thai percentage .
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It
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aprooach
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approach
 34%
form
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from
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 the data
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 ,Indian
restaurant
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restaurants
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is
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have
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 become
to
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apply
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second place for
prefering
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preferred
 people .Moving on to the lowest places that
pepole
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people
 prefer
it
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apply
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to
takeaway
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take away
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such
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 as, Greek,Italian,Persian,
japanese
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Japanese
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,
mexican
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Mexican
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,and
chinese
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Chinese
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. The
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figures between
 all these countries
is
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are
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 in the same proportion which is almost 1% .One more point to add , Some
individuales
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individuals
did'nt
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didn't
 prefer to order at all
form
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from
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 restaurants .Maybe
the
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they
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 prefer to
cooking
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cook
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by
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for
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their own self
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themselves
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.
To sum up
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. looking
to
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at
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 the
chart
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.The
most high
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highest
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 percentage of
take away
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takeaway
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restaurant
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restaurants
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Add a missing verb
is commomley
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commomley
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commonly
popualre
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popular
 between
Indian
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India
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 and Thai.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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