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Band 4.5

Some people believe that university education should be free for everyone, regardless of income. Others think that students should pay tuition fees to maintain the quality of education.

People tend to argue that
should
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the population to study
in
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at
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 university for free.
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Although others
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Others
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 believe that
students
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 should
have
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have to
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 pay tuition fees to equal higher
education
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 quality. I
agrees
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agree
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 with
this
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 sentiment
i
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I
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 believe that
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a bachelor
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degree must be without paying fees. Because investment in people is the greatest force
will
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that will
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 return for the country. On one hand, The concept of
Study
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Studying
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 in universities without
pay
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paying
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 fees for citizens
it
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apply
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gives them more
powerful
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power
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 and
comfortable
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comfort
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to
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in
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compete
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completing
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 their
education
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.
In addition
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, The biggest project for the country is Investment
on
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in
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 today’s youth. Because
,
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apply
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education
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 is the fundamental
needs
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need
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 of any person
how
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who
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wants
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want
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want to
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 follow his dreams
as
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apply
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like medicine, Teaching, engineering Etc. And that it will always drive the wheel of development.
For example
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, Gulf countries do not require anything in return
specially
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 in
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education
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the education
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 sector. They
are invest
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are investing
are invested
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 in their population as well All the higher positions are real citizens. And
i
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I
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 totally agree with
this
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 Agreement.
On the other hand
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, Many people believe that
must
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most
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 learners pay the cost
for
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of
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the
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a
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degree.
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Due to
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To
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 assist the government
to cover
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in covering
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 the
education
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 sector requirements
also
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brings
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bring
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the
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apply
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higher qualifications teachers,
Provide
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and Provide
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 appropriate buildings. And what
students
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needs
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need
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.
For instance
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. Studies have shown that Harvard
university
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University
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 is the hardest
education
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 in the world. They have higher standards for
acceptance
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the acceptance
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students
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of students
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.
In
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contrast
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contrast,
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 they provide the best teachers,
healthy
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a healthy
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 environment, And they prepare the
students
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 hundreds
percent
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per cent
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 for the workplace after graduation. In conclusion,
bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degrees are essential matters for any person and
has
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have
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 become a primary
requirements
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requirement
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 must to
the
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apply
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rich countries
provided
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provide
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no cost
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no-cost
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education
Use synonyms
.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction presents both sides of the argument clearly and that your own opinion is stated explicitly. You mentioned your agreement, but the position could be articulated more strongly at the outset.
task achievement
Try to develop your ideas more fully and provide more specific examples that relate directly to the argument. This will make your points stronger and clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Work on sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity. Several sentences have grammatical errors that can obstruct understanding. For example, use 'should' correctly and omit extra words to improve conciseness.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases more effectively to connect your ideas and paragraphs. This will enhance the flow of your essay and make it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
task achievement
You presented a clear view in favor of free university education, which is a thoughtful position and reflects a strong belief in the value of investment in people's education.
task achievement
You included relevant examples from Gulf countries and Harvard University that contribute to your arguments, showing some awareness of real-world contexts.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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