Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balance diet is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There is an ongoing belief among individuals that working out is the primary key to
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others argue that having proper
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is essential. In
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essay, I will explore both perspectives before presenting my own viewpoint. On one hand, exercising daily improves
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physical and mental
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.
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, ongoing research studies have provided us with evidence, that working out improves cardiovascular
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, reduces respiratory problems and reinforces musculoskeletal strength.
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, it
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impacts mental
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by improving concentration and memory.
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, involving in a group-oriented physical
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will improve critical thinking and teamwork.
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, exercise has a positive impact on our lives on a daily basis.
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, balanced
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is critically or equally important as exercising. During the workout, the body loses calories, salts and many other critical nutrients
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the breakdown of various tissues.
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, an extensive breakdown of muscles occurs during powerlifting, which requires a diet high in protein consistently, compared to a cardiovascular
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that might require a high potassium dietary intake following or during the
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to prevent muscle cramps.
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,
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enhances the outcomes of exercise when properly tailored to the requirements. In conclusion, I state that personally curated
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for a certain
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level and routine training will enhance
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health
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and well-being which will optimize our lifestyles towards a healthy standard.

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Task Achievement
The essay addresses the topic effectively and presents both viewpoints, but could be more evenly balanced. Each side could benefit from deeper exploration of the arguments presented.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clarify the presentation of your opinion in the conclusion to strengthen your final statement. The transition between the two paragraphs could also be smoother to enhance the overall coherence.
General
Consider using more variety in sentence structure and vocabulary to demonstrate a wider range of language proficiency.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and presents valid arguments for both sides of the discussion.
Task Achievement
You successfully included specific examples that illustrate the importance of both exercise and nutrition in maintaining health.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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