The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The pie graph depicts the destination of a university graduate after their bachelor's degree. The table illustrates the different employment opportunities of anthropologists
together with
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their corresponding salaries after working for five years. 
Overall
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, the placements of university graduates from the anthropology department were mostly in full-time work,
while
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post graduate
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post-graduate
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study
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and part-time work
was
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the least chosen field after graduation.
On the other hand
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, in terms of salary grade, a steady increase in payment was observed in the government sector
while
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private companies started with high
earning
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to a reduced rate.
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, more than half of the alumni decided to be employed full-time
while
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10% chose part-time work. A 12% unemployment rate was recorded and
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while
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two-thirds of
this
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value was written as unknown. The rest furthered their knowledge with postgraduate
study
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with most number focusing on their
study
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while
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5% preferred to
study
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while
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working.  In line with
this
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, alumni employed in private companies (10%) received $25,000 - $49,000 with
second
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year as the highest rate of 35%
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decreased significantly. In terms of freelance consulting, it started with
low
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a low
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salary of 5% to a steady increase
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until
40%. Meanwhile, for a steady rise in salary, beginning with 5% and ending with 50%, the government sector is surely a good choice.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words study with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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