Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social prblems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statements?

Many
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opinion that living in a foreign country without knowing the
language
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can cause social and practical problems. I know from my own experience that
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is only true if you are not willing to face your
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barriers and keep to yourself. When
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went to Australia a few years ago, my
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was mediocre at best and
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had a hard
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understanding the
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around me.
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was supported by my two
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friends which
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could count on to help me take over difficult situations.
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, when they left
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was on my own, in a state where
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had trouble talking to
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.
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, I was left with two choices,
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keep to myself and hope the
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goes by fast or learn the
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. Thankfully,
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chose the second option and just talked to
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with the little
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knowledge I had. It appeared to me, natives
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don't
judge bad
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and are happy to help your process. After a short amount of
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time
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I made many friends and my problems at the
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had nothing to do with
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language
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barrier.
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, studying a new
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is hard in the beginning and can demotivate someone to keep learning, as it can be a very tedious process. And in the unlikely event of
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not caring to aid you, social problems can emerge quickly. In conclusion, going to a different country is mostly a state of mind and will only become a problem if one isn´t willing to get out of their shell and
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the best they can. In my case, it was the best decision to stay in
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Australia
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and meet so many different
people
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i
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could have a conversation with
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my motivation to learn new vocabulary.

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Consider elaborating more on how social and practical problems can arise when living in a foreign country, even for those who try to learn the language. This will give your argument more depth and address the issue from multiple angles.
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Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly, perhaps with clear topic sentences. This will guide the reader through your essay more effectively and improve the overall flow of your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
A few grammatical and spelling errors (such as 'eighter' which should be 'either' and 'i' should be capitalized) can be distracting. Review your work for these small inaccuracies before finalizing it.
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You provided a personal experience that effectively illustrates your point and makes your argument relatable and engaging.
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Your conclusion succinctly summarizes your main point and reinforces your perspective, demonstrating a clear understanding of the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proficiency
  • miscommunications
  • social isolation
  • underemployment
  • language barrier
  • cultural misunderstandings
  • practical issues
  • everyday situations
  • fluency
  • parent-teacher meetings
  • accessing services
  • cultural faux pas
  • frustrations
  • legal aid
  • serious repercussions
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