The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two
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charts visualize the money transfer done by visitors from a foreign country to the United Kingdom. There is
also
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an illustration of the
reasons
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for travelling to the
UK
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. First of all, when looking at the first graph, we can see a steadily increasing amount of money spent in the
UK
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. Within the shown time span, there are major changes between the years in both directions. The
pie-chart
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shows the differences
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visiting
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between the year 1980 and the year 2010, where
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and other motivations decreased
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intentions
such
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as business trips and meeting friends and relatives have increased. In the time periods from approximately 1992 and
1996
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1996,
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we can see a significant increase
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money spent by tourists, followed by a steadily falling demand
on
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buying services and goods in the country.
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the turning point in the year 2002 that motivation started to
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again until 2006. After that conjunctural phase, the financial transfer from tourists in the
UK
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sunk again. The
reasons
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for
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havent
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haven't
changed
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a crucial way since the
80's
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,
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the distribution of the different
reasons
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for visiting the country changed over the decades. Nowadays there are
less
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foreign people coming during their holidays or in their free time.
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Furthermore
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the specific motivations,
such
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as business meetings have increased slightly,
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the share of visiting relatives and friends in the
UK
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have
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strongly increased.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, whereas".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • overseas visitors
  • significant rise
  • primary reasons
  • pie charts
  • holiday visits
  • business trips
  • visits to friends and relatives
  • expenditure
  • travel options
  • economic factors
  • tourism marketing strategies
  • global travel priorities
  • proportions
  • changing
  • correlate
  • reflect
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