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Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balance diet is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

In
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 day and age, individuals are inclined towards the
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gym and other fitness activities
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, some people argue that eating habits play a vital role in staying healthy.
This
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 essay will discuss both points of view in upcoming paragraphs before reaching its conclusion. To embark on, there are various reasons why exercise is essential to stay healthy, and the obvious one is that it makes people active in their daily life as they will be hitting the gym which makes them fast in their work and make them more productive and increases blood circulation.
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, it acts as a stress buster as it not only helps a person to maintain physically but
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 mentally which provides them happiness and
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 life longer.
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, having a proper meal with proper protein and nutritious make

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task achievement
Make sure to address both sides of the argument thoroughly and provide a clear opinion in the conclusion. This will enhance your task achievement score.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and transitions smoothly from one to another. This will improve the logical structure and overall coherence of your essay.
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Your introduction clearly states the topic and outlines the main points of discussion. This sets a good foundation for the essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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