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Band 4.5

Some people think that printed books are no longer needed in the digital era, because all writing can be stored electronically. Others think printed books will still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Undoubtedly, we live in an era where
books
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 and
information
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is
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 easily obtained via the
internet
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.
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 some individuals believe that the
use
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 of
books
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are
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 becoming something from the past, others feel that hardcopy
information
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 pieces will
stil
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still
 have an effect on
todays
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today's
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 society. I firmly believe that the
use
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 of
books
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 has no longer a purpose unless it is in
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 digital form.
This
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 essay will support
this
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 statement. The world we live in today has no
time
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 and space to take out
books
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 and read.
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 is
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because
 the era of having
time
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 to sit down and take out a book has
past
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due to
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 the busy lifestyle and
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time consuming
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 jobs. People tend to enjoy the feeling of having to take out their smartphones and have access to
information
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 rather than going to a
book store
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bookstore
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 and finding a suitable fit.
Therefor
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, individuals prefer to
use
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 digital
copy's
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copies
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 of
information
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.
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, older
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generations
generation
 still
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 the feeling of paper in their hands. A study done by the North-West University of Carolina
,
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 has shown that the number of elderly people still
prefering
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preferring
prefer
 the
use
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 of
books
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 and paper
newspaers
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newspapers
 has increased
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the
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the
last
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 decade. Resulting in some
publisher's
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publishers
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 rapidly increasing the number of
hardcopy's
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hardcopies
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 to cover the needs of these pensioners.
Unfortuanatly
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Unfortunately
this
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 only caters for a mere 20% of the United States population. In
conlcusion
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conclusion
, individuals still prefer to have
power
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 of
information
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 in the palm of their hands,
while
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 there
are
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is
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 still a low percentage of people
prefering
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preferring
hardcopys
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hardcopy
hardcopies
.
Accessability
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Accessibility
 and
time
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plays
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 the biggest role in the high need
of
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for
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electronical
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electronic
copy's
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copies
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.

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task achievement
Improve the clarity of your argument by providing stronger and more specific examples to support your points. Additionally, ensure your thesis statement reflects the nuances of your opinion more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical flow between paragraphs by using transitional phrases. This will help the reader see how each point builds on the previous one, making your argument more effective.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling as errors can distract from your message. For instance, correct 'becuase' to 'because' and 'hardcopys' to 'hard copies.'
task achievement
You present both sides of the argument, which shows an understanding of the task and engages with the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes the main points well and reflects your opinion clearly, which is important for closing the discussion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized access
  • carry thousands of books in a single device
  • eliminating the need for physical storage space
  • environmentally friendly
  • reduce the carbon footprint
  • adjustable font sizes
  • integrated dictionaries
  • enhance the reading experience
  • tangible experience
  • distinct smell of paper
  • do not rely on electronic devices
  • battery life or device malfunctions
  • perception of greater legitimacy and trustworthiness
  • academic circles
  • extensive reading materials
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