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Cooking at home is waste of time and energy because there are so many convenient outside food options that make life less stressful. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
todays
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today's
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 world fac-paced world the convenience of ready-made
meals
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 is becoming increasingly appealing. Many people argue that cooking at home is a waste of
time
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 and energy . Especially when there are numerous options for quick and easy
meals
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avaiable
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available
outsides
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outside
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. The
prospective
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perspective
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highlight
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 the benefits of opting for pre-prepared
meals
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. Which can
singifilcatly
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significantly
 reduce stress and free up
time
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to
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for
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 other
activites
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activities
. One of the
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primary
peimary
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primary
 reasons people consider home cooking to be a waste
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time
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of time
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 is the sheer convenience of ready-made
meals
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 with
rise
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the rise
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 of food delivery services and casual dining ,individuals can enjoy a variety of cuisines without the spend hours in the kitchen allowing people to save
time
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 on meal prep and cooking for busy professionals ,parents and students

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language
Ensure that you proofread for minor spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'today's' and 'significantly'.
structure
Strengthen your introduction by clearly stating your stance in response to the prompt (i.e., whether you agree or disagree).
content
Include more specific examples or a personal experience to support your arguments more effectively.
content
You've identified a clear theme regarding the convenience of ready-made meals, which is relevant to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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