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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

In developed countries, more and more people buy and use their cars. Do the advantages for people of cars using outweight its disadvantages on environment.

These days,
People
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 who live in advanced countries
are
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have
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 an
icrease
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increase
 in the number of buying and using
cars
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. There are the positive impacts of travel,
While
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 There are the negative impacts of traffic jams and pollution. The best feature in increasing the number of buying and using
cars
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are
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that
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apply
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traveling
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travelling
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.
Cars
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 allow
people
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 to go to any place
the
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in the
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 world and any
time
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 , without waiting for public
transports
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transport
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scheduals
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schedules
schedule
 or
take
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taking
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 more
time
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 to arrive
to
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at
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 your destination
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such
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apply
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as
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For
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 At university some students have their
orwn
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own
cars
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 that they
have
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are
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 never late and come
on
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at
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 the
time
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 of
lecture
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the lecture
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.
As a result
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.
People
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 will save more
time
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 and not stress.
On the other hand
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, Increasing the number of buying and using
cars
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that creating
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creates
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 traffic jams
due to
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 there
are
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being
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 no
limite
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limit
of
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to
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 buying and using
cars
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, Which means that
people
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 will
late
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be late
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 or miss
an
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apply
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important things.
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, Employees might
late
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be late
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 or miss their worktime, Meanwhile their
emloyer
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employees
 might
has
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have
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 a negative attitude
to
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toward
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his
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their
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emplyees
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employees
 or a bad impression of
his
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their
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 employees. As a
consequences
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consequence
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,
Employer
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the Employer
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 might discount
his
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their
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employee
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employees
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 salaries.

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task achievement
Ensure you clearly state your position in the introduction and briefly summarize your main points in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid spelling mistakes, such as 'icrease' and 'scheduals', as they can distract the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas more clearly, possibly separating the advantages and disadvantages into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
You provided specific examples, like the case of students arriving on time, which adds relevance to your argument.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, which is important for a balanced discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • mobility
  • accessibility
  • economic growth
  • independence
  • urban congestion
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • air pollution
  • health issues
  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • car-sharing initiatives
  • electric vehicles
  • status
  • quality of life
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