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21 May 2025, The table shows the Proportion of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

21 May 2025, The table shows the Proportion of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the proportion of children who attended four different secondary
schools
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 from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of students attending grammar
schools
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 and voluntary-controlled
schools
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 showed a descending trend,
while
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 community
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schools
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school
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 students followed an upward trend.
Moreover
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, specialist
schools
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 experienced a slight decline over the period. In 2000, the
percentage
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 of pupils in voluntary-controlled
schools
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 was the largest compared to the three other
schools
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.
However
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,
this
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 number decreased to 38% in 2005 and 20% in 2009. During the same period, pupils who studied in grammar
schools
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also
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 declined every four years, dropping by 5% to reach 12% in the final year. As for community
schools
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,
although
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 they had the lowest
percentage
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 at 12% in 2000,
this
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 number rose significantly and it became the only type of school where pupil attendance rates grew.
On the other hand
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, specialist
schools
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also
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 had 12% of attendance in 2000, but their figure declined
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% every year, for a final
percentage
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 of 10% in 2009.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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