The charts show the main methods of transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the main methods of transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts show the main methods of transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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and provides information about the main methods of transport of people travelling to one university divided into five categories in 2004 and 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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from the chart
car
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cars
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was
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were
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the biggest percentage of the sectors in 2004
by
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approxmimately
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approximately
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half represented by 51%.
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, the second half represented 4 sectors namely bicycle , bus , train ,
walking
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and walking
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.
In addition
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,
car
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the car
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was
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sharply dropped by about
the
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half
at
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28% in 2009 .
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Moreover
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there is
noticeable
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increased
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in walking from 2004 to 2009 by approximately double at 16 % respectively.
On the other hand
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, it is obvious from the chart the trains
remaineded
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remained
reminded
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the smallest category in both years it just had slightly increased by 1%.
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, we could say
the
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cars became
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common for
the
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people in 2009 and trains
still
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are still
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the
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less popular
for
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among
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the
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students .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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