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The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graphs illustrate the
number
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 of
tonnes
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 of
vegatables
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vegetables
 purchased and imported to
Qatar
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 and
Oman
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.
Overall
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, spinach accounts for the largest imported
vegatable
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vegetable
vegetables
 in
Qatar
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 and the second in
Oman
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.
In contrast
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, Garlic forms the largest
number
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 in
Oman
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 and the second in
Qatar
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. Meanwhile, the quantity of imported ginger is the same
at
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 both countries. Regarding the
number
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 of imported garlic in
Oman
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, it comprises the highest amounts of vegetable purchases among the rest, at 800
tonnes
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, but in
Qatar
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, it accounts for 340
tonnes
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, making
the
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it the
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 second largest.
On the other hand
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,
spanich
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Spanish
spinach
 is the largest imported type in
Qatar
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 at 450, followed by garlic at 340
tonnes
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.
Altough
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Although
 imported
spanich
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spinach
 is higher, it is not the largest imported vegetable. Peas
makes
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make
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 up 400
tonnes
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 of the total
import
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imported
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 vegetables in
Oman
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 and
makes
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make
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 up 150
tonnes
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, making the lowest
number
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. Meanwhile,
brocooli
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broccoli
 is the lowest in
Oman
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 at 300. Both
Qatar
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 and
Oman
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importes
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import
 the same
number
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 of ginger, at 300
tonnes
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tonnes, qatar, oman with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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