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Writing Samples
Band 4

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages

In conclusion,
the
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apply
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Driverless vehicles have more advantages than disadvantages as it will reduce
number
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the number
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 of accidents on the road, it will
also
Linking Words
 save the cost of commuting one place to another and
saves
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save
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 time. On the opposite side, drawbacks can be measured with the actions of vehicle
owner
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owners
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 and roads by
government
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the government
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.

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task achievement
Try to explain your ideas in more detail. This will help the reader understand your points better.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words, like 'firstly', 'on the other hand', and 'for example'. This makes your essay flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to give a clear introduction that tells the reader what you will talk about. This helps set the stage for your main points.
task achievement
Your conclusion nicely sums up your main points about driverless vehicles.
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You have identified both advantages and disadvantages, which shows a balanced view of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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