IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.Yh table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.Yh table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table and pie charts illustrate
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
which
police
Use synonyms
 budget was spent in Britain between 2017 and 2018. The money is measured in
pounds
Use synonyms
.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the most common
police
Use synonyms
 budget donated by the National Government was 175.5
million
Use synonyms
pounds
Use synonyms
 in 2017. It was followed by Local Taxes had 91.2
million
Use synonyms
pounds
Use synonyms
 in the same period. There was a more substantial contribution to the
police
Use synonyms
 budget in 2018. In 2018, the most money came from
also
Linking Words
 National Government, 177.8
million
Use synonyms
pounds
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, local taxes experienced a significant increase
by
Change preposition
from
show examples
 11.1
million
Use synonyms
pounds
Use synonyms
 to 102.3
million
Use synonyms
pounds
Use synonyms
 in 2018.
Secondly
Linking Words
, most
police
Use synonyms
 money was spent on Salaries for officers and staff, accounting for 75% in 2017. It was followed by buildings
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
transport, and technology, with each having 17% and 8%.
In contrast
Linking Words
, there was a noticeable decrease in salaries, which stood at 69% in 2018.
Spent
Replace the word
Spending
show examples
 on technology increased from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words police, pounds, million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: