The graph below shows the number of overseas users who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.

The graph below shows the number of overseas users who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of overseas users who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.
The line graph illustrates the amount of UK visitors for three different kinds of purposes during the years 1989 and 2009.
Overall
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, there was a torrent of fluctuations in the number of overseas users who came to the United Kingdom for holidays, business and visiting family members or close friends.
Also
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, the most number of them were
people
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who came for
holiday
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a holiday
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in comparison with the others. At
the
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apply
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first sight, it can be clearly seen that, in 1989, about 6.5
million
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people
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came for holidays
while
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it was about 4.5
million
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people
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for business and about 3.5
million
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people
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for
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apply
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who came to visit their family and friends.
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, in 2004, they were
in
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at
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a similar level,
at the end
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the number of visitors for holiday
purpose
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purposes
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increased
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by about9
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about9
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about 9
million
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people
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and the others rose to 6.5
million
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people
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. Another point that should be mentioned is related to 1999. At
this
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time the visitors for holiday purposes experienced a huge rise near 10
million
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.
On the other hand
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, the two others had a minimum increase
about
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of about
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6
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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