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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

People produce more carbon emissions and garbage than in the past. Explain how it is affecting us and the measures that could be taken to address the situation. Provide specific examples and explanation to support your answer

In recent times,
due to
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 human activities more
carbon
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emissions
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 and garbage
is
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are
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 generated than in past. In
India
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India,
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this
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problem
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 is aggravated because of its vast population.
This
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 essay highlights the effects of
waste
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 on human life and
environment
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the environment
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 and
also
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 suggests some appropriate measures to be taken to solve the
problem
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 with valid
explanation
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 and examples. First and the foremost
problem
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due to
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carbon
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emissions
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 is global warming. There
is
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has been
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 a substantial increase in
number
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a number
the number
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 of vehicles used
than
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apply
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in past,
this
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 has
lead
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 to more amounts of
carbon
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emissions
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, which
releases
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release
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 harmful gases like
carbon
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 dioxide and methane into the air causing air pollution.
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 results in increased sea level which can lead to submerging of coastal areas in
near
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 future.
Secondly
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,
accumulation
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the accumulation
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 of
waste
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 can cause water, air and soil pollution, which can be detrimental not only to human health but
also
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 the terrestrial and marine life.
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, many farmers are using chemical fertilizers to increase crop production,
the
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and the
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run off
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runoff
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 water from the agricultural fields gets mixed up with the nearby water bodies causing eutrophication
resulting
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and resulting
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 in
death
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the death
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 of marine creatures.
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, some preventive measures can be taken to control the
problem
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 of
carbon
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emissions
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.
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, people should not be allowed to use their vehicles without adequate PUC certification. If found guilty strict action should be taken by the government.
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, public awareness campaigns should be carried out by the government to make the people aware
about
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of
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 the ill effects of
waste
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 accumulation. In conclusion, with effective measures taken by the government, the harmful effects of
waste
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 generation on
environment
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the environment
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 and people can be controlled.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to link your ideas more clearly. Use connecting words to show how your thoughts fit together.
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Provide more examples or details to support your main points. This will help to explain your ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to write a stronger introduction and conclusion. They should summarize your points clearly and restate your main idea.
task achievement
You identified important problems caused by carbon emissions and waste.
task achievement
You suggested clear measures to address the issues, which shows good understanding.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Climate change
  • Non-biodegradable
  • Ecosystems
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Sustainable practices
  • Recycling
  • Environmental pollution
  • Biodiversity
  • Air quality
  • Respiratory diseases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Environmental justice
  • Public awareness
  • Eco-friendly
  • Global cooperation
  • Regulations
  • Single-use plastics
  • Waste management
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