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In many countries, people are choosing to live alone instead of with family. Do the advantages of living alone outweigh the disadvantages?

In many nations, individuals are selecting to live alone rather than with family. Well in upcoming paragraphs discuss about merits and demerits of
this
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. On the one hand, people are following
western
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 cultures nowadays they love to live single
instead
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 of their near and dear ones most of them living alone in other countries
for instance
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. Students who go to other nations for their higher study.
As well as
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 a survey was conducted in 2022
in
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 Oxford University 60% of the masses do not live with their family.
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, when they are far from their house they learn a lot of
things
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 in their life
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 as housekeeping, cooking, do laundry.
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, know the real value of money and how to earn, spend and save.
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, the demerit of
this
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 person is homesickness and it’s tough to live without family.
Firstly
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, breakdown from their cultural or traditional
things
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 like languages, clothes and food do not know about these
things
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 properly.
secondly
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, bonds are broken
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 their home because they are busy in their stressful life, so they do have not much time to call or message their family.
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 one of the major issues is that do not go back home till the years. In conclusion,
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 living far from their family is good for people to learn and get new
things
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 in their life. As it has some demerits
also
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they
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break
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breaks
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 down from
their
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its
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 cultural and traditional roots.

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task achievement
Try to make clear arguments about the advantages and disadvantages. Give specific examples for each point you make.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your introduction has a strong thesis statement and that your conclusion summarizes your main points clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better and to make your essay flow more smoothly.
task achievement
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages of living alone, showing you understand the topic.
task achievement
The use of examples like students studying abroad is relevant and helps illustrate your points better.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Elderly
  • Accumulated wisdom
  • Tradition and history
  • Guidance
  • Family life
  • Cultural practices
  • Innovation
  • Technological advancement
  • Economic productivity
  • Adaptable
  • Globalized societies
  • Physical attributes
  • Labor force
  • Economic growth
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