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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In the era of automation, some
people
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 believe that
transportations
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such
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 as cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. Only passengers will travel inside these vehicles.
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this
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 idea is possible, I believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
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 negative impacts,
people
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 should not trust in the automatic machines, especially in traffic circumstances.
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 humans can make mistakes, the uncontrollability of humans and relying on machines can cause accidents more seriously.
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, Artificial Intelligence used to give users wrong information since new releases, and make individuals misunderstand, as
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results
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,
people
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 live unexpectable to rely on a machine
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 no one ensures their safety.
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,
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traffic issues and accidents are worrying
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urgently, enhancing awareness
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 each individual's driving on the road is more necessary.
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 of cutting down on
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employment
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, training them to be more responsible not only for passengers, and their family including. To look at the reality, unemployment is widespread in many countries.
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 innovation could cause enormous consequences to societies and the economy rather than its benefits. In a nutshell, despite altering the mechanism and operating in relevance with modern life. I do not believe that machines can change human domination.

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Make sure to clearly explain your main points. This will help the reader understand your argument better.
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Use simple linking words to connect your ideas. This will make your writing flow better.
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Try to give specific examples for each point. This will support your arguments more strongly.
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Strengthen your introduction and conclusion. They need to clearly state your position.
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Your essay presents a clear opinion on the topic.
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You have good ideas about the issues with driverless vehicles.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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