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In many places, people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Some individuals are curious about their country's
history
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.Because of that, they are interested in finding information about where they live . In my opinion, the perfect way to gain knowledge is trips .
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, there are often websites that provide reports ,and documentaries that relate to
history
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 . The primary solution to the above statement is that
,
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citizen
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a citizen
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 can't get offers for trips around their city.
Government
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The government
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 includes
this
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 offer by website or apps now.I speak from experience because
last
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 summer my parent saw an ad on social media about
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the
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offer that attracted citizens
,
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and tourism for exclusive journeys around the country.They applied tour guide to inform us about the landmarks ,and significant places. It's actually was a nice and enjoyable experience .
I
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It
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 satisfied my curiosity,and it was a greatly beneficial tour.
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. Since we are in a social media period it's easy to find any information or to explore many things.
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, if
i
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dont
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don't
 have the financial capacity to handle travelling expenses
i
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I
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 can find the whole world
while
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 I'm sitting in my house .
For instance
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, Netflix is one of the popular programs that illustrates
show
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shows
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 including the
history
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 nation with specific details.
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 , the major people in our countries .In
another word
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,Recently they have added the whole story of bin-laden which was the
history
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 of many nations,
such
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 as the UNITED STATE . It's been a huge issue in the past years that ended up by
US
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the US
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 FBI .
Hence
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,I know the whole process with your effort by watching
this
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 program.
Therefore
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. In my opinion ,Since we are in development time in multiple things . I believe that people have the ability to access
to
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history
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 by using social media or trips
offer
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making
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 it really
ease
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easy
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to
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for
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 people to find out their inquiries, and interests.

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coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points, as this will strengthen your argument.
content
You have included personal experiences, which helps to make your points relatable.
content
The topic is interesting, and you show a good awareness of current information sources.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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