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The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ZHa

The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ZHa
The bar chart provides data regarding the percentages of
the
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international
students
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 who graduated from UK universities between 2000 and 2015.
It is clear that
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 at the beginning of the period, the
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highest
higher
 percentage of
students
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 graduated from
Oxford
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,
Cambridge
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, and
Cardiff
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.
However
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, by 2015,
London
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also
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 became quite popular. Focusing first on
Oxford
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,
Cambridge
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,
Cardiff
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, and
London
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, in 2000, around 15% of
students
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 finished their studies in
Oxford
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 and
Cambridge
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,
whereas
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 for
Cardiff
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 and
London
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, the corresponding figures were roughly 10% and 5%, respectively. By 2015, more
students
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 preferred these universities, with around 1 in 4 of them graduated from
Oxford
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 and
Cambridge
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. Regarding
London
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, the proportion of its
students
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 skyrocketed to almost 25%,
while
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 for
Cardiff
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, the figure was 10% lower. As for Bristol and Bath, in the initial year, slightly more than 5% of their international
students
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 graduated.
However
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, by 2015, their proportion increased to roughly 10 and 15 per cent.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, oxford, cambridge, cardiff, london with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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