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Band 4.5

Nowadays, the growing trend of convenience food helps to adapt to the modern lifestyle. This trend can be beneficial for people with a hectic lifestyle as it can be prepared in a short time period. However pros definitely outweigh cons as this product may lead to dangerous health issues

In today's fast-paced world the increasing popularity of convenience
food
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reflex
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reflects
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 the demands of modern lifestyles. With long working hours and busy
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schedules
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schedule
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schedule,
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 many people
relay
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rely
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 on ready made to save time and effort
while
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this
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 trade offers certain advantages it
also
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 raises concerns about chronic health effects in my view the drawback of consuming convenience
food
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for
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outweigh
it's
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 benefits. On
one
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 hand,
package
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to
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of
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food
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is
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unreli
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incredibly
 helpful for
individual
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individuals
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 with hectic routines. It allows them to have
a quick meals
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a quick meal
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 without the need
of
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for
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 extensive preparation of
food
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 by themselves.
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, it is
a
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quite difficult for professionals and college students to allocate their time for cooking and they seek,
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a ready
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ready
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ready-to-eat
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to eat
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meal as a practical solution.
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, advancement in
food
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 preparation and storage for longer periods is an advantage, fortified with nutrients as well.
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, completed independence
on
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process
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the process
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to
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of
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food
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 can cause serious situations in a person's life.
Majority
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 of these products contain high
amount
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amounts
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 of sugar, salt and unhealthy fats, which can contribute to chronic diseases related to
circulatory
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the circulatory
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 system of
human
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the human
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 body and
server
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severe
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 digestive elements. In
audition
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addition
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, consumption of junk
food
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 can result in poor dietary habits and deficiency of
a specific nutrients
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specific nutrients
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 in growing children.
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, preservatives and artificial
addictives
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additives
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 like
a
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apply
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sweetness can force fatal health risks. In brief, it cannot be done I do that
take
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taking
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 away
food
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 is a quick and easy solution for people with busy
life styles
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lifestyles
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, it's a negative consequences cannot be overlooked.
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, individuals should be encouraged to
adapt
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adopt
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balanced
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a balanced
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 diet which
include
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includes
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 fresh and healthy meals. In
a
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the
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 long run, is
for
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more beneficial than
a
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saving a few minutes.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas are organized clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea with supporting details.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar for mistakes. This will help make your writing clearer and easier to read.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, name a specific health issue caused by convenience food.
task achievement
You explored both sides of the argument, which shows good thinking about the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You made a clear conclusion that ties your ideas together well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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