The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999. gp

The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999. gp
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999. gp
The line graph
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illustrates
the quantity of people
visit
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to and from the
UK
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from 1979 to 1999. Meanwhile, the bar chart indicates the number of countries
UK
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residents
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most likely to
visit
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in 1999.
Generally
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it could be obviously witnessed that the
quantity
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number
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of individuals both
on
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apply
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foreigners
visit
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UK
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and
UK
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residents
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visit
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abroad shows
a
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increasing trend.
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,
most
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the most
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popular countries in
UK
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residents
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' mind were Spain and France. Upon closer examination of the concrete data, the number of foreign citizens
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visit
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visiting
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UK
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the UK
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increased slowly from approximately 10
millions
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million
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to 29
millions
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million
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between 1979 and 1999. At the same time, the number of
residents
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from
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UK
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the UK
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went
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who went
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abroad increased dramatically by 40
millions
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million
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in
this
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period.
Among
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During
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this
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time, the rising trend from 1987 to 1999 was more evident versus previous time both on these two aspects.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visit, uk, residents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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