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Nowadays more and more people are using media like TV or online platforms to read news instead of reading newspapers. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently, a lot of individuals use
media
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such
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 as television or
Internet
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 websites to read
news
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instead
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 of reading newspapers.
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 the utilisation of social
media
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 to get
information
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 is costly and worsens
digital
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 divide among the elderly and low-income earners,
this
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 situation is highly beneficial because it provides convenience and easier
access
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 to its users. On the one hand, one major disadvantage of reading
news
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 on online platforms is
because
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 it deepens
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 divide. Not many
people
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 especially the elderly,
low salary
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low-salary
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 earners, and
people
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 in remote areas have
access
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 to the
Internet
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 and digital literacy skills to navigate the web effectively.
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 limits the number of
people
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 with
accesibility
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accessibility
 to knowledge and inclusion.
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, it is expensive to use the
Internet
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 and constantly download and upgrade the latest features of various social networking apps.
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, in Nigeria, many
people
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 living in rural areas cannot afford and do not have
access
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 to
information
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.
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, one of the merits of reading
news
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 on
media
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 and television is because of its convenience. Nowadays,
people
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 can watch, read and
isten
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listen
 to
news
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 from the comfort of their homes, virtually anywhere without having to buy physical
newpapers
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newspapers
 and magazines.
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 is highly beneficial to
people
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 living in remote areas and those who have limited mobility.
Moreover
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, obtaining
news
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 from online platforms is easily accessible to gather lots of
information
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 across various social
media
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 apps.
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, many
people
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 in the United Kingdom, have
access
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 to the
Internet
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 and
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 use social
media
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 to obtain
information
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. In conclusion,
although
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 reading
news
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 from online streaming applications is costly to maintain and widens inequality, its advantages outnumber its disadvantages because of the unmatched convenience and easy
access
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 to
information
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to provide more specific examples to support your points, especially for the disadvantages.
coherence
Try to organize your ideas more clearly in paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea with supporting details.
cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. This will help the reader follow your argument better.
structure
You have a clear introduction and conclusion that outline your argument well.
content
You addressed both advantages and disadvantages, which shows a balanced view of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant access
  • latest developments
  • rapidly changing world
  • interactive nature
  • comprehensive understanding
  • dynamic
  • inclusive society
  • environmental benefits
  • carbon footprint
  • reliability
  • dissemination
  • unverified
  • biased news
  • investigative journalism
  • journalistic standards
  • thorough
  • accurate
  • news reporting
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