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The pictures below show the recycling process of wasted glass bottles

The diagram shows the recycling process of wasted
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 jars. It explains how used
bottles
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 are collected, cleaned, and reused to produce new
bottles
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 for sale.
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, the recycling process has three main stages. It starts with the collection and cleaning of used
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bottles
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, followed by melting and shaping in a factory, and ends with the
bottles
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 being filled and sold in shops again.
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, wasted
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bottles
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 are collected and taken to a recycling point.
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, they are transported to a cleaning station where high-pressure water is used to wash them. Later on , they cleaned the
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 are sorted them into three colour groups: brown, green, and clear. In the subsequence stages, the sorted
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 are crushed into small pieces. These
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 pieces are
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, sent to a
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 factory. Inside the factory, they are melted in a furnace at a temperature between 600°C and 800°C. The recycled liquid
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, sometimes mixed with new liquid
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, is poured into moulds to form new jars.
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, the new jars are filled with drinks, transported to supermarkets, and made ready for sale.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use varied linking words to connect ideas better, such as 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally'.
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Avoid small grammar mistakes, like missing articles (e.g., 'the' before 'cleaning station').
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Try to give more details in each stage of the process to improve clarity and depth.
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The essay has a clear introduction that outlines the recycling process.
coherence and cohesion
The overall flow of information is logical, making it easy to follow the recycling steps.

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