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The bar chart gives information about the number of overseas Japanese tourists between 1985 and 1995, and the line graph illustrates percentage of those going to Australia between 1984 and 1994.

The bar chart gives information about the number of overseas Japanese tourists between 1985 and 1995, and the line graph illustrates percentage of those going to Australia between 1984 and 1994.
The bar chart provides key information about the number of overseas Japanese tourists between 1985 and 1995, and the
line
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 graph illustrates the proportion of those going to
Australia
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 between 1984 and 1994. The unit in the bar graph is measured in numbers travelling abroad (in millions), and the unit in the
line
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 chart is the percentage coming to
Australia
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, it is clear from the bar chart that, there was a gradual increase in the volume of Japanese tourists travelling. As we saw, Japanese individuals started traveling nearly 5 million in 1985, until arrived at 15 million tourists in 1995.
According to
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 what is shown, the
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 graph started in 1985, with 2% of people coming to
Australia
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 . After that, there was a significant climb in 1988 achieving close to 5 per cent. Between 1988 and 1989 there was a slight decrease.
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, from 1989 until 1993 there was a steady rise and got to 6%. In the end, the
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 remained the same portion of Japan's tourist market in
Australia
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 94%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas tourists
  • chart analysis
  • data interpretation
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • tourist trends
  • economic factors
  • promotional activities
  • visa policies
  • cultural influences
  • social factors
  • culmination of trends
  • speculation
  • preference shifts
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