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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

As a part of their education, individuals should spend a period of time living or working in another country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Living or working in a different
country
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 will enhance cultural understanding and awareness of a person.
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 will
also
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 increase an individual's employability and career
propects
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prospects
due to
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a
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apply
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diverse
experience
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 and problem-solving skills. Prioritising the fact that living or working in
other
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another country
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country
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 will diversify a person in different ways
such
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,
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 cultural, lingual, spiritual, etc.
While
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 working with the people of
seperate
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separate
 region you start learning about their
culture
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 and language which will increase your understanding towards
different
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a different
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 group of people
as well as
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 grow your people handing skills.
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: An employee working from India will not be able to understand the
culture
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 of
USA
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the USA
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 or Canada as long as they do not visit or have
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experience
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experienced
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working
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the working
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culture
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 of
specific
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a specific
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country
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.
Secondly
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, knowledge
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gain
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gained
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 from another
country
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 will help you
startup
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start up
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 a business or take it to the next level
according to
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 the positive things you
experience
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 overseas. Adapting skills you observe and implementing
it
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them
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 in your business is the best way to make it a success.
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: Tim
Horton
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Horton's
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 is a very big chain of
resturants
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restaurants
 in Canada
overall
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 has so many positive aspects which if some local
resturants
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restaurants
 in other countries apply in their work
culture
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 can help them
gain
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alot
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a lot
 of new
customer
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customers
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 and retain old ones. These things can only be learnt when you visit different countries and get to
experience
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 their environment.
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, It is very
cruisial
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crucial
 for a human being to spend some time of their study time or job
experience
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 in a different
counrtry
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country
so
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to
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gain
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 interpersonal and cultural
gain
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.
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,
this
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 is not possible for everyone since it is very expensive and not everyone can afford it.
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, those who go through
this
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 exposure will get an edge over
majority
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the majority
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 of
population
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the population
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.

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task achievement
Make the introduction clearer and state your opinion clearly.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Try to give more examples or details to support your main points.
task achievement
You have addressed the topic by discussing benefits of living or working in another country.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • global citizenship
  • employability
  • adaptability
  • diverse experiences
  • language immersion
  • communication skills
  • independence
  • resilience
  • personal circumstances
  • financial constraints
  • career prospects
  • accelerate language acquisition
  • foreign environment
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