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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

It is irrefutable that humans are usually reluctant to change anything in their
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 can cause plenty of problems in their personal growth and even influence their career
development
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, there are some solutions that can enhance
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 and increase the level of
decision making
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 among
people
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individuals
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 are unwilling to make
changes
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due to
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 their fear of changing their daily
routine
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routines
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. Escaping from
changes
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 means escaping from opportunities
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 because mostly they lead to some positive effects and personal growth.
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, in
a
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career
development
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,
changes
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 always mean
increase
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an increase
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 in the number of responsibilities.
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 some
people
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 are scared to accept them and reluctant to add more duties
in
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 their
lives
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, others receive a promotion, salary rise, and better
qualification
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qualifications
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, which makes them more demanding employees.
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, refusing
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 can
also
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 lead to a decrease in the quality of
people
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’s
lives
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,
due to
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 the fact that
world
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 experiences
changes
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 every day ,and standing aside
of
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changes
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 means moving down in general
development
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. To solve these problems,
individuals
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 can
involve
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make
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 little
changes
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 in their
lives
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 would help them to be accustomed to them, and accept
changes
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 as opportunities in reaching something better in their
lives
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, involving new healthy activities in daily life
routine
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routines
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such
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 as running in the mornings or doing yoga , seem to be a new regular duty, but
also
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 undeniably assist
people
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 in reaching a better and healthier body. What is more, doing certain activities or starting to do some with friends or in a group would
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 positively influence
personal
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development
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 of
individuals
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. Completing tasks together increases self-confidence and fosters motivation, which makes it easier to accept
changes
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 in
people
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’s
lives
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. In conclusion,
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 some
individuals
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 refuse
making
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to make
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changes
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 ,
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 means that they would lose some opportunities in their
lives
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. To solve
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 trend,
people
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 can include little
changes
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, or begin to change
together with
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 a group or friends.
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 will make them more confident and comfortable about their
changes
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Your opinion

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