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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the figures
of
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film
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films
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 produced over three years by five countries.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
Country
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 A can
produced
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 the highest of
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film
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films
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 among the five countries.
Whereas
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,
Country
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 E had a stable trend with no noticeable increase or decrease over the three-year period. In 2007, both
Country
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 C and
Country
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 E
shows
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 similar figures, at around 10
films
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 each .
MeanWhile
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,
Country
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 D experienced
a
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significant growth,
prodcing
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producing
 approximately 20
films
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.
Nevertheless
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, the
hightest
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highest
 number of
films
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 was produced by
Country
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 A, reaching 85, followed by
Country
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 B with around 50
films
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. In 2008, there was no difference in the number of
films
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 produced by
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 A and
Country
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 B compared to 2007, remaining 85 and 50
films
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, respectively.
Country
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 C’s
film
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 production slightly increased, reaching about 15
films
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.
Conversely
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, the number for
Country
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 D declined notably to the same figure.
Country
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 E’s output remained unchanged at 10
films
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. In terms of 2009,
Country
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 A experienced a slight decline in
film
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 production, dropping to 80
films
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.
In contrast
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,
Country
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 B showed a noticeable increase, rising to 70
films
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 after remaining unchanged for two years.
Similarly
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, production in
Country
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 C climbed to 20
films
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.
Country
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 D's output
also
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 rose, returning to the same level as in 2007, at around 20
films
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. Meanwhile,
Country
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 E continued its consistent trend, maintaining a stable figure of 10
films
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 for the third consecutive year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words film, country, films with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Film production
  • Trends
  • Consistently
  • Significant
  • Comparisons
  • Patterns
  • Increased/Decreased
  • Analyzed
  • Anomalies
  • Industry changes
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural aspects
  • Collectively
  • Overall trend
  • Reported
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