Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to impose strict penalties for traffic offenses, while others believe that education and awareness campaigns are more effective. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

some people argue that for road
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safety
there must be strict traffic
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, if they are broken
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others
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thinks
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think
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that deeper knowledge and education can help them to improve. In my
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education is more
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reliable
. In
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views will be discussed
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, there are
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groups
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of people that suggest that imosing
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strict
traffic
rules
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can help from preventing accidents and unseen circumstances but there can be
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consequences
if one cannot get caught and the
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victim
may suffer. For
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instance
, There is a study
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that if
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an individual
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and
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and there
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won't
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be a number plate to hide from the author, they
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can't
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be caught. there are
rules
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but they
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can't
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hel
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help
them.
Secondly
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, there are people that suggest that having a great knowlegege and the
campagin
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campaign
about
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safety
can really help and one will act intelectuality rather than acting
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.
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, If a person
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breaks
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the rule they will work with the
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instead
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of ignoring the
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. they will notify the
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will be more clear.
To sum up
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, there will be greater and good
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decisions
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decisions
with the guidelines rather than just
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behaving
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being
recklessely
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recklessly
with the
rules
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,

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grammar
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. For example, 'imposing' instead of 'imposing', and 'reliable' instead of 'reliable'.
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task achievement
The introduction gives a clear view of the two sides of the argument.
coherence
The conclusion summarizes your thoughts well, showing your overall view.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • traffic offenses
  • strict penalties
  • impose
  • deter
  • heavy fines
  • jail time
  • education
  • awareness campaigns
  • understanding
  • dangers
  • texting while driving
  • safer choices
  • fear
  • habits
  • culture of safety
  • risks
  • importance
  • following traffic rules
  • real-life stories
  • accidents
  • reckless driving
  • combination
  • solution
  • bad behavior
  • mindsets
  • lasting change
  • view road safety
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