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The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate Barmouth
town
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 before and after predicted new changes to prevent automobiles from entering the old
town
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.
Overall
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, Barmouth
town
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 will expand and be
tranfomed
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transformed
 from a rural
in to
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into
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 an urban area with the addition of features like a foot walkway with cafes and restaurants, two car parks , a supermarket, a bridge and
foot
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a foot
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 entrance. In the southwest area of the map, a bridge is projected to be constructed over the river tweed with the addition of a supermarket
closeby
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close by
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. There will be a
footwalkway
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foot walkway
 on the river bank with
chill out
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chill-out
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 spots to entertain tourists.
Furthermore
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, two car parks will be constructed in the northeast and northwest regions of the
town
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.
In addition
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, the road entrance to the old
town
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 will be replaced by
foot only
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foot-only
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 entrances to the old
town
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 in order to prevent cars from
enterin
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entering
 the old
town
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • pedestrian-only zones
  • environmentally friendly
  • landscaping
  • public transport system
  • vehicular movement
  • central area
  • tourists
  • eco-friendly
  • cycling paths
  • health-conscious
  • attractive
  • residents
  • visitors
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