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Band 5

You have received a job offer from a country where lives one of your childhood friend. Write a letter to him: • Tell about this happy event in your life; • Ask him for help finding accommodation; • Ask him to advise the best ways to get prepared for the new life in that country

Dear John, I hope
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 letter finds you in good health. I am writing
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 letter to express my excitement about getting a job offer from Canada, Ontario.
i
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 have been waiting for
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 moment
from
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for
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very
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 long time. I was
applying
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applying for
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 jobs
everyday
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 in
hope
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the hope
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 that
i
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will
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 get my dream job and
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finally
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finally,
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i
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I
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 got it and that too in one of my favourite
country
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countries
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 where you live. I got the manager position in an IT company. Most importantly, I can not wait to see you.
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,
i
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I
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 was a little worried about the accommodation as everything will be new for me. So, it
will
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 be very helpful and safe for me if you could assist me with
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. My firm is located in
toronto
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Toronto
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 near
E-ton
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the E-ton
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 centre and
i
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 am looking for a place around
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 area only. My preference would be an
appartment
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apartment
 but let me know what is better in your opinion.
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, please suggest
me
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to me
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 some things which
i
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 should get from here and about the weather too. So that, I can carry essentials for a smooth transition of settling down there. I am looking forward
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 your reply. I hope to see you soon. Yours lovely, ABC

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Grammar
Make sure to capitalize the first letter of each sentence and proper nouns (like 'I', 'Canada', 'Ontario', 'Toronto').
Coherence
Try to keep a clear structure by separating each idea into its own paragraph more distinctly.
Vocabulary
Use more varied vocabulary instead of repeating the same words, like 'I' and 'whenever'.
Positive Expression
You express your excitement clearly about the job offer, which gives a personal touch to the letter.
Task Achievement
You ask specific questions about accommodation and preparation for the new life, showing consideration for your friend's help.
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