There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Some
people
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argue that criticising globalisation is preventing
progress
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the progress
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of the world. I believe that
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is a part of freedom of speech and does not
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pushback for
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development, as
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essay will demonstrate.
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with,
people
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have the right to speak their
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, it is a part of human's fundamental rights. In some cases, constructive
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can lead to a positive outcome.
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, in America, constructive comments are considered normal practice in the workplace.
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can
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as precaution or room for improvement.
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, negative
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can be toxic,
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people
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in today's world have gained enough awareness to avoid the impact of bad
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criticism
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it is true that globalisation brought the world together, it
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brought several social issues. Mental
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one of those topics.
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social media brought
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closer, at the same time, it caused
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a psychological
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impact on the entire planet as well.
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, since the invention of social media, the global number of patients who suffer from depression disorder
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significantly. In
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decade, data have shown more cases of children with depression than before.
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,
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who criticise new technologies might just be cautious or
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about other social
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dimensions
. In conclusion, I firmly disagree that
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who criticise globalisation or new technologies
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standing in the way of
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development Simply because they have concerns, does not mean that they are against new progress.
Criticism
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is a freedom of speech,
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basic human right, and a precaution towards
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brighter future.

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas flow logically from one to the next.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly presents your main argument and that your conclusion summarizes your points effectively.
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You have presented a clear opinion against the idea that criticism limits progress.
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Your discussion of the social issues brought by social media is a relevant example.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • international trade
  • cultural homogenization
  • multinational corporations
  • sustainable development
  • economic disparities
  • technological advancement
  • cultural exchange
  • scrutinize
  • ethics
  • innovation
  • connectivity
  • protectionism
  • outsourcing
  • free market
  • trade liberalization
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