Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree?

It is argued that
companies
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should provide sports and social facilities in their local communities.
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, I partially agree with
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, and I will substantiate my reasoning in
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essay. On the one hand, when
companies
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invest in sports and social facilities, it promotes well-being and
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strengthens
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their relationship with the local population.
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, building gyms, parks, or
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can improve public health and social integrity.
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indirectly benefit the company through enhanced public status, increased employee satisfaction and even potential local support during times of crisis or protest.
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, when resources
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,
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initiatives reflect positively on the company’s values and social
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.
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, the
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ownership
of providing the facilities to a
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solely
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with the government. That being said,
companies
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can sponsor events and social gatherings as a way of promoting themselves in the
community
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.
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, in Melbourne, many
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companies
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sponsor cricket and football tournaments, whilst during the festive period in December, many play host to different parties, for which they help to promote local musicians, in a sort of encouragement for everyone involved. In conclusion, I feel that it is welfare for
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to sponsor events, both sports and social events, and not traits as a way to establish themselves in the
community
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.
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, it must be done to help the
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come together, rather than make themselves in the minds of the citizens.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and restate it in the conclusion. This helps the reader understand your position.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each paragraph to guide the reader. This will improve the flow of your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid some spelling mistakes, like 'strengtens' (should be 'strengthens') and 'corported' (should be 'corporated').
task achievement
You included a good range of ideas about how companies can help local communities.
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Your example about Melbourne shows a real-world connection and makes your argument stronger.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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