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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided map illustrates three different sites for a newly built
supermarket
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 (A,
B
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, and C) in Ellington City.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the given areas, the
supermarket
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 has three different areas to be located.
Moreover
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, 120.000 populated
city
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cities
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has
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have
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 some sort of
location
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 where the city of Hampford is nearly 15km away from Pellington. The map consists of
colored
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coloured
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 spaces which represent various features; residential, industrial, motorway, railway, and countryside.
According to
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 the provided data, when looking at the given map more closely, it can be observed that the A side, which stays left of the traffic-free zone and park, could be suitable for almost all conditions. It is located in the centre, and because of the
location
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 of the
supermarket
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, every area could benefit from
this
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. Especially for tourists, the
location
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 of the
supermarket
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 is the best option for A side,
thus
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 the position of A is close to the airport. Not only that reason, features of
such
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 roads,
such
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 as the railway,
is
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are
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 located
nearby
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near
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 A.
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,
B
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 and C lost their importance
due to
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 the lack of accessibility. Especially, for
B
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, it is placed in a very rough
location
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 for any kind of business. Expect the factor of motorway, most
close
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closest
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 side among
three
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the three
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 categories goes to
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the B
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B
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 category.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, such".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words supermarket, b, location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proposed sites
  • supermarket
  • locations
  • central
  • outskirts
  • residential areas
  • transport hubs
  • proximity
  • major roads
  • landmarks
  • accessibility
  • competition
  • shopping district
  • industrial area
  • green spaces
  • logistic ease
  • isolated
  • densely populated
  • traffic
  • customer reach
  • expansion possibilities
  • accessibility
  • customer base
  • logistical convenience
  • recommend
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