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Band 3.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The
given
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two maps illustrate the current site of Southwest
airport
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Airport
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 and the proposed changes for its future development.
Overall
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, the site of the airport is expected to become much bigger, with new trains added and numerous new facilities. At present, the site of Southwest
airport
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Airport
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, on the south side, has
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departures
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a departures
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area
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 on the left, and
arrivals
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 are opposite. In the
departures
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area
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, there are check-in counters and a cafe, before entering security and
passport
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 control. Not far from the security
area
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, there are two empty areas, which directly lead individuals to
walkway
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the walkway
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 to enter their gate, there are eight
gates
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 in total. Meanwhile, in the
arrivals
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area
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, there is an empty space behind
passport
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 control customs. After renovation, the
departures
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area
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 will have an added new bag drop, on the northern side of the cafe,
while
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 the
arrivals
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area
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 will have an added new cafe and ATM
area
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.
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, a new car hire spot will be added in the right corner of the
arrivals
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area
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. The security
and
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passport
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 control and
passport
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 customs will remain unchanged. The empty areas in
departures
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 will have more shops built,
while
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 the
arrivals
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 side will remain the same.
Next,
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another ten
gates
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 will be added, and two trains will be added to access the
gates
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. There will be 9
gates
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 on the left and 9
gates
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.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly describe all main changes in the airport layout. For each area, mention what will be added or changed. For example, you could specify that new shops will be built in the departure area. This gives a complete response.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall structure of your essay is good, but try to use clear linking words or phrases to help the flow from one point to another. Words like 'In addition' or 'Moreover' can guide readers better.
Task Achievement
You introduced the airport's current and future layouts clearly, setting a good context for your essay.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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